Getting Acquainted -by Shintobreak (~BBW,Romance, ~SWG)

[shintobreak]

~BBW, Romance, ~SWG - breaking the ice is always difficult, but the payoff can be big

Getting Acquainted
by Shintobreak

Chapter Zero (More of a prologue than anything else; mostly character descriptions)

The moment he saw her he knew he had to have her. Not in a stalkery sort of way mind you, but in an I-want-to-hopefully-spend-the-rest-of-my-life-with-you kind of way. This feat would be easier said than done given our protagonist’s lack of confidence when it comes to the ladies. At this point I feel we may be getting a tad ahead of ourselves, so first let’s introduce our hero and the apple of his eye.

Jack was, as his name would imply, a jack of all trades. Not particularly good at any one activity, but not horrible either. He was an average Joe with above average looks, but lacked the self-esteem to use them to his advantage with the ladies. He was a student in college, looking for some sort of direction in life, one that wouldn’t lead to a life in a cardboard box on a busy street corner. His head could usually be found deep in a thick novel when he wasn’t checking out a particularly attractive girl and cursing his luck at not being able to say anything to her.

The girl, Laura, in this seemingly ordinary plot was far from ordinary. Possessing extraordinary looks, the fact that she was also down-to-earth further heightened her beauty. Flowing brunette locks cascaded down her shoulders, while cute bangs parted to her left side framed her rounded face. Her skin was a milky white and her blue eyes were a contrast to her silky cream complexion. To compare her to an apple would be somewhat inaccurate, rather she was more akin to the pear of Jack’s eye. She had extremely shapely thighs with a bottom to match, causing her to sashay sexily without even having to try. She had a smaller set of breasts, perhaps an A or B (It’s always hard to tell), but Jack had always been more of an “ass man” anyways, so this wasn’t important to him at all. She had a cute “muffin top” with a deep belly button that would always show through her blouses which were worn seductively tight. Her love handles could always be seen in plain view as her clothes did a poor job of covering her up. To complete this picture, her face hinted at the future of a double chin.

Because they went to a smaller college, faces were recognizable. Jack frequented a cozy coffee shop and always saw Laura there, he just never had the courage to say hello before, until today that is…

[Continued in post 5 of this thread]

[TH3_GH0$T]

I like your writing. It's not perfect, but I like the ideas behind it. There's potential here (for both the writing and story itself), it'd be great to see it continued (or rather properly started). Congratulations, four paragraphs and you've got me hooked, :)

Also, on another note, I'd be happy to edit this to show what I'm talking about, seeing as it's short and I've got nothing better to do for the moment. Just give me the ok.

[shintobreak]

Edit how? I'm always open to listening to constructive criticism, and in addition I appreciate your comments/compliments. (: I figure that I'll be writing more over the weekend and will expand on both the characters as well as to remove them from the vacuum they're currently in and establisha setting.

[Observer]

What Ghost means by "edit" is that he would rewrite your material to reflect his desired changes and then either send to you or post it here. He wants to know of your interest before he spends time doing it. Frankly its a kind offer and I would suggest accepting it. I concur that you have excellent talent and would like to see it developed.

This brings up an issue. We do not presently have a Writer's Workshop Forum (although it has been discussed) for "stories in progress.". It therefore creates a problem when multiple versions of stories or stories without titles are posted. You have no way of changing such lacks after the initial posting revision time elapses. Only a moderator such as myself can make such changes.

So what do we do here? I will leave this thread in place until at least Sunday to allow you to start another with a title and more material. After that it will either be deleted or moved to the Discard Forum for adoption.

[shintobreak]

Chapter One: Maude's coffee shop

Maude’s was the local coffee shop where you went because you were “indie” or because you had to study and needed that extra jolt of caffeine to get you through a night of cramming for that exam the next morning. Or in Jack’s case, you just wanted a good cup of coffee to accompany an equally good book. Having taken his eyes out of his book long enough to notice that his cup was empty, Jack got up from his secluded table to order another latte. To his delight and dismay Laura was in front of him in line!

“What am I going to do? I refuse to spend another night alone, but I haven’t the slightest of what to say to her. Crap!” Jack thought to himself, fumbling with the empty mug in his hand.

Unfortunately for him, the sweat from his palms cause the mug to slip out of his hands, coming to a deafening thud as it hit the hardwood floor and splintered into a few sharp pieces. Laura having heard the crash and being the helpful soul she is turned around to help whoever had dropped their cup. She happened to bend down at the same time as Jack, resulting in their butting heads.

“Ow!” they both exclaimed as they rubbed their heads.

“I appreciate your help. I can be kind of a klutz at times. My name’s…” Jack trailed off as he found himself getting lost in Laura’s eyes.

“You’re Jack, aren’t you? I think we share a philosophy class together. You seem familiar in any case. I’m Laura, nice to meet ya!” Laura said as she stuck her hand out.

Jack shook her hand and added, “We have that exam coming up in a couple of days. Are you here to study? I wouldn’t mind going over the material, if you aren’t already here with a study group.”

He hoped that by some miracle she was here by herself.

“Nope, no study group; actually, I prefer to study alone, but I guess I’d be alright with a quick review.”

As they ordered and paid for their drinks, Laura followed Jack back to his table where they sat down and took out their notes. When he finally had a chance to catch his breath and get a good look at her, Jack was almost blinded by her beauty, her glow wishing he had some sunglasses to shield his vision with. She was wearing a tight top that was hanging off of one shoulder that revealed her small yet perfect breasts were bulging out of the plunging neckline.

Jack had gotten a quick view of her backside while they were in line, and that image would remain with him for quite a while. Her bottom was in a struggle with the denim fabric to be set free, quite evident by the fraying of her jeans at every seam. The tightness of her jeans only added to the seductive quality of her gait. Her lovehandles were also put on display, and Jack yearned to be able to knead them as part of the foreplay of a prolonged lovemaking session. Her belly was also in plain sight, hanging about an inch over her ridiculously tight pants.

To any observer it was clear that they weren’t going to get any studying done. Each of them had a secret agenda, to keep the other talking long enough to result in making a date for some other time. As the time ticked away on the clock, an employee came over to their table telling them that the shop was closing in ten minutes.

“Whoa, we’ve been here that long? I really enjoyed not studying Philosophy with you, Jack.” Laura said as she nervously rubbed her plump forearm.

“I know me too. Um… I don’t know what your plans are like for this weekend, but if you’re not busy, would you like to do something?” Jack managed to squeak out.

“I’d love to! I mean, yeah I would like that,” Laura replied, cursing at herself under her breath that she sounded so dumb for being too excited.

What Jack failed to realize was that for as long as he had been eyeing Laura, she had been doing the exact same thing.

(to be continued)

[TH3_GH0$T]

Edit how? I'm always open to listening to constructive criticism, and in addition I appreciate your comments/compliments. (: I figure that I'll be writing more over the weekend and will expand on both the characters as well as to remove them from the vacuum they're currently in and establisha setting.

No problem.

Since Observer pretty much covered the editing question, I took "I'm always open to listening to constructive criticism" as "Yes" and went ahead and PMed it to you.

I always have trouble with the plot/setting part, hope that goes better for you.

[Observer]

OK - executive decision time. This story, however awkwardly its emergence has been, is coming along well enough to do something constructive with.

I'm therefore christening it with an interim name - "Getting Acquainted," formatting it to standards and providing it with suitable inter-post links. Lret's see if we can encourage rather than discourage emerging talent. If you want to change the title let me know.

Thank you Th3 Gh0$t for your tutorial efforts. As some may have norticedd I've been adapting French and Dutch works to an English speaking audience this week.

[shintobreak]

Having been inspired to write because of Observer's post in another story on the board, and because I don't want to study for my exam right now, here's Chapter Two.

Chapter Two: First Date Woes

Before they both left the coffee shop, Laura and Jack had exchanged numbers and other bits of info. Immediately after getting home, both of them logged onto Instant Messenger and contemplated messaging the other. Not wanting to seem too eager, they each impatiently waited for the other to begin a conversation. At the exact same time, they each messaged each other which caused a mutual ‘lol.’

After chatting it up for a few hours plans were confirmed. They were to go see a movie at the local Cineplex followed by dinner. As they lay down to go to sleep, both felt as if they were on cloud nine.

When Saturday finally came, Jack and Laura took very different approaches to getting ready. While normally the neurotic type, Jack felt oddly at ease and didn’t worry too much about his appearance, letting his confidence shine through. Laura on the other hand was a much different story.

“I’m such a mess!” Laura shrieked, prompting her roommate Laney to quiet her down.

“I’m trying to sleep! Calm the heck down!” Laney screamed from her bedroom.

“I’m such a mess!” Laura loudly whispered to herself. While she was far from looking her best, she was definitely not a mess. What mostly alarmed Laura was that her clothes were tighter than normal. While the blouse she had on, a black silk top that glittered at just the right angle normally hung past her belly and covered a bit of her jeans was now a belly shirt. Her chubby waist was just barely visible and it would be apparent to anyone that saw her that she had developed a muffin top. Her jeans were also more constricting, as she was having some difficulties getting them over her thighs and butt, yet managed to button them. She noticed this and made a mental note to head to the mall in the next few days.

“I can’t really do anything about my clothes, at least not now. Here’s hoping that Jack doesn’t notice or doesn’t mind. Guys don’t have that sharp of an eye, do they?” Laura fretted.

Their date had been scheduled for mid-afternoon because Jack was planning on spending all of Sunday to study for an exam on Monday. Laura didn’t mind and at this point was glad she’d be able to get up early to go to the mall before anyone could see her in her current form. While her style of dress may have suggested that she loved her curves and was confident in her body, it was more of a mask she put on in order to face the world. When she was by herself she shed this façade and became increasingly worried about her ever softening form.

They met up outside the Cineplex where Jack offered to pay for her ticket due to his old fashionness. Laura graciously thanked him and they went to go find their seats. Jack noticed Laura looking toward the concession stand and suggested that if she want something that she should get it.

“I haven’t eaten anything all day, but I also don’t want to spoil my appetite for dinner,” Laura said.

“Okay then I’ll get something, and if you want some you can have some.” Jack saud cheerily.

After getting a tub of popcorn and a drink they ventured into the movie which by now had started. Stumbling around to find seats, Laura’s jeans had accidentally gotten caught on an armrest, causing her button to pop open. Her belly gushed out and while she felt less pressure around her midsection she didn’t immediately make the connection.

When they sat down, Laura started to go to town on the popcorn. Jack inwardly smiled at this and when he glanced over at her he saw that her jeans were opened. Not wanting to embarrass her he didn’t say anything. Halfway through the movie, Laura finished all of the popcorn and decided to go and get more. As her eyes adjusted to the light of the lobby, she saw that her zipper was open and more of her belly was in plain view. Not being able to handle this well, she ran into the restroom and quietly sobbed.

Jack kept checking his watch and after ten minutes had passed, he decided to go look for Laura, thinking that something bad must have happened since the theater was deserted and it wouldn’t take minutes to buy another container of popcorn. When he walked near the bathroom door he could the faintest of sobs and figured that Laura must have noticed her jeans and was shaken up by it.

Knocking softly on the door, he called to her. “Laura, open up. It’s Jack.”

“Go away. You won’t want to be seen with me. I’m disgusting.”

“Why would you say something that you know to be completely untrue?” Jack inquired though he knew exactly where she was going with this.

“I haven’t been able to control myself! I just keep gaining weight. I must have put on about fifteen twenty pounds since getting into college and now I can’t even button my pants!”

“Laura, I saw your pants and I couldn’t care less. You’re attractive and you know it! You just need the confidence to go with your beauty. Please now, come out of the bathroom.”

After Jack’s little speech, Laura instantly felt a little better about herself. While not fully accepting her body as that would take some time, she knew that she was good looking and a potential relationship with a guy that liked her this way. Resolutely walking out of the women’s room, she wrapped her arms around Jack and gave him a peck on the cheek. As she felt him get a bit stiff due to her embrace, she giggled causing Jack to blush.

“How ‘bout we skip the rest of the movie and go get some dinner? I’m famished,” Laura smiled as she rubbed her belly, no longer completely disgusted by it. Her confidence would only continue to grow along with other things in the weeks to come…

[Observer]

Hey, thanks for listening! I wish more peopl;e would take my hints about continuing their stories so promptly!

Prsonal opinion: It would have been a little more credible if Jack had taken her to a mall for some slacks that fit before letting her confidence return to the point of suggesting dinner. But a good tale in progress and deserving of a "bump"to the top of the marquee.