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I would say I have an idea but I think its a bit (waves hand from side to side) stupid.
You could present it in a pdf the same way bustartist and the BreastExpansion story archive present their stories with 6-7(this would vary due to the size of the story of course) pictures placed in to it and at the end have the pictures that you did not use.
 
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Ah! Well to tell the truth I haven't figure out how it will end. I have a few things in mind, but I'm writing this off the cuff, so when I sit down and have a some time to write I'll conclude it. I figure it will be two more segments maybe, and should have them done by Sunday or Monday.

As for TheStudio, he sent to me a large number of incredible sketches from the Heavy Debt story, and he also gives me invaluable help on the editing of each segment that I write for that now, as well as ideas for the how story develops.

I've been holding onto the sketches deciding what to do with them and how best to present them. I do intend to show them but don't have a great venue yet. I'm open to suggestions, and The Studio has said they're mine to do with as I'd like. They're so good though I want to make sure they get the right showcase.
This is exciting news.:D

I suppose the obvious venue would be here on Dimensions.

Two ways to do this came to mind. One would be to repost the Heavy Debt story here on the forums with the illustrations, possibly with the sketches placed between the appropriate sections or paragraphs to which they correspond in each post.

The possible problem would be that this would result in two separate series of threads for the same story, one with the sketches and one without, which might be confusiing. This could make it awkward to try to read the whole thing at once and unless the threads were stickied they might eventually be lost in the depths of the forum archives. As well as the problem of the story (and sketches) being split up among the different parts and posts, making it less easy to find.

However the advantages are that this could be done gradually, and before the entire story is finished if you wanted, as well as not requiring any special programs or tools except for an image hosting site from which to link the sketches.

Another option might be to place the sketches in The Studio's section here on this very site, possibly including a link to your collected story. But likewise, this would necessitate the story (and possibly the sketches too) being completed first and collected in a single file.

Though it would keep all of the images in one place it could lead to a disconnect if the reader is continually flipping between two pages or tabs: one of your story and one of the sketches, as well as having to make sure that the two correspond properly. But this would make sure that it wouldn't be lost in the depths of the forum archives


I would say I have an idea but I think its a bit (waves hand from side to side) stupid.
You could present it in a pdf the same way bustartist and the BreastExpansion story archive present their stories with 6-7(this would vary due to the size of the story of course) pictures placed in to it and at the end have the pictures that you did not use.
A .pdf file could work but it would require that JP. (or possibly someone else) be familiar with Acrobat in order to make it as well as have a version of that can create .pdf files. It would also require that the story (and accompanying sketches) be completed prior to its construction, unless it would be multiple .pdf files such as one of each "part" which would allow for a potential gradual release to begin before the story is actually finished.

With regard to Bust Artist, I would imagine that the artist prepares his illustrations to fit full pages in anticipation of a .pdf release. I don't know what size the sketches that The Studio has done are, I think that they woud be of sufficient size to be placed on their own individual pages in such a document without resizing. I think that all of the sketches should be included. JP's story is more than long enough to accommodate them, either within the body of the text or on individual pages.

Also, doing it in the format of a .pdf or multiple .pdfs would require a host for the files. They might be able to host them here but I don't know of any other .pdf files on Dimensions.

Personally, my vote would be for a .pdf or some other type of file that allows both text and images into which both your story and The Studio's sketches could be assembled.
 

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Ok thanks for waiting, here's the next part of the show!
 

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Tom gave the crowd and the contestants a chance to see the options that were available to them for almost a minute before the wheel changed into a viewing screen.

“Ladies and gentlemen, our first event was chosen as a mutual incident that happened to these two ladies just a few months ago. This was at a wedding reception for a friend of theirs. Let’s watch.”

The screen came to life in an elegant banquet hall, decorated in white with festive music playing in the background. The camera was merely panning over the tables with people waving to the camera and then a sudden commotion in the background near the bridal party’s table drew the attention of the crowd as well as the cameraman.

Initially it couldn’t be seen very well, but then the autofocus on the camera kicked in to show two young women grappling with each other. Both were wearing fine party dresses and the crowd began screaming as their hands entwined in both their hair and the material of their clothes. The gasps of the wedding guests were echoed by the studio crowd as the two girls fought.

It was now apparent that the two girls were none other than Lisa and Patricia, and the some of the studio crowd began shouting and hooting at the action, while others were dumbfounded at the vast difference in the size they now had. The girls tumbled into the table and nearly flipped it, causing the towering wedding cake to fall over.

The girls were so entwined that it was difficult to definitely see who was who. One of them reached over and grabbed a handful of the fallen cake and mashed it into the other’s face, the one that now had cake in her eyes suddenly pulled and twisted the other’s dress and tore off the top. With the ripping of the dress all could see it was Lisa that had just been partially stripped; she was not as buxom and full chested as Patricia, who was trying to wipe cake out of her eyes now. Despite the sudden revelation and her screams of outrage, Lisa responded gamely and grabbed hold of Patricia’s dress and ripped it to the waist as well.

The studio crowd was screaming ‘Catfight! Catfight! Catfight’ as they watched it, and most home viewers agreed that this was one of the best they had seen in awhile on the show (catfights were always a favorite).

The camera briefly turned as a loud shriek went through the banquet hall and the bride was seen walking in holding her hands to her face as she saw the carnage of her wedding reception. The camera returned to the action though as the two girls wrestled into another table and collapsed it, spilling a punch bowl on top of them both.

Finally waiters and guests managed to pull the two apart and the video ended. The crowd was still clapping and cheering while both Lisa and Patricia looked ready to die of embarrassment even more now, Patricia managed to hide her face in her hands somewhat as her arms weren’t quite as fattened as Lisa’s. Lisa merely looked straight ahead grimly as tears of shame rolled down her face.

Surprisingly Tom was not clapping or applauding, he had on his ‘Thoughtful Tom’ look which he occasionally used to drive home valid points.

“So ladies” Tom began. “You’re at a mutual friend’s wedding reception, and before the bride and groom are even introduced, you teo start going at it and wreck the whole thing. It was supposed to be the happiest day of their lives.”

He shrugged and shook his head and the crowd quieted down as they contemplated the enormity of what the two had done. “I was going to ask who started it, or what set it off…but it really doesn’t matter now does it? One of you should have been…big enough…to prevent it from happening.”

Tom sighed heavily before the game show smile returned on his face as the screen faded and the wheel was shown again.

“Ok then! Enough of that! This is Paybackers! Alright, that was definitely one of the best catfights we’ve seen right?” asked Tom to the crowd as Lisa and Patricia snuffled from the brief lecture that Tom had given them. The crowd applauded their agreement with Tom.

“I mean Patricia was working the body pretty well, Lisa made effective use of a wedding cake, they both got topless and then drenched in punch. I really couldn’t say who won! Oh sure maybe the Russian judge might have scored it differently, but I think it came out even. Let’s find out if the girls thought so too, or if one of them wants another bite at the other. What do you say girls? Can this event be forgiven? Forgotten? Or is one of you still salty about it? OK, to help this along we need to use the buzzers and the nanites. We can tell you have limited mobility, so we’re going to put the buzzers back in your paws, and when you’re ready to give your answer just mash it. We want you to say your choice at the same time so that you don’t know what the other is going to do. Once you’ve made your choice the nanites will kick in and let you say ‘Forgive, Forget, or Payback’. Could I get some assistants here?” asked Tom as stage crew came out and used the metal stairs again to put buzzers back in each of the girls’ flippers.

“OK, are we clear? Take some time to make your choice, there’s no rush. Push the buzzer when you’re ready.” The lights dimmed on the stage, focusing on just the two immense women, their ton plus bodies casting massive and strangely shaped shadows on the floor as they decided what they were going to do about this. The light flickered and then turned green over Patricia.

“Fatty Patty has made her choice!” announced Tom, moments later Lisa’s light turned green as well and the house lights came up. “They’ve both decided! OK ladies, we’ll be letting you announce your choices. We’re going to help out with the nanites.” As Tom was saying this microphones descended from above to rest in front of their mouths.

“OK in 3…2…1 let’s hear it!”

“Forget!” they both announced in perfect unison. There was silence for a few moments and then slow applause from most of the crowd. Tom nodded as he looked at either woman.

“Johnny, they’ve chosen to forget, nothing happens right?” asked Tom

“That’s right, they can only forget once.”

“OK, both ladies chose to forget on the first round. Hmmm, that could make it tough later, now they can only forgive or payback, tough choices. OK Patricia, explain your choice please.” Said Tom. The spotlight framed Patricia and sweat rolled down her pudgy face and into the enormous expanse of flesh on her body.

“There…there was no excuse for that. It was just wrong and the only one that can forgive that would be Gina and her husband Eric. I’m so sorry Gina!” blubbered Patricia into the microphone.

“OK, OK, we can see that you’re clearly sorry for this. Lisa, what have you got to say?” said Tom as the spotlight turned to Lisa.

“<Sniff!> We ruined their wedding night, that’s all that mattered. I’m sorry too Gina!” Lisa began crying and couldn’t even lift her hands to wipe away her tears. One of the stage crew climbed up the stairs and wiped her face to help out, eliciting some applause from a slightly sympathetic crowd.

“OK, I think we’re finally starting to see how this feud can hurt innocent people. Alright, ladies we need your game faces back on now. Now we slow things down a bit and go one at a time. We’ll flip a coin, Lisa you get to call it because you sent in the initial request to put the two of you on the show. Whoever wins the coin toss can choose to go first or last. Now be careful! You might win something with forgiveness, but with payback you just earn the cold satisfying taste of revenge.” Tom pulled out a large and shiny coin and showed it to the camera; it featured his cartoon devil face on one side and the other showed the same cartoon devil from behind, the tail pointed upwards.

“Call it Lisa.” He said as he flipped it with a slight ringing noise.

“Heads!” announced Lisa, her voice thicker and heavier as it resonated from deep within her huge torso. An overhead camera shot followed the progress of the tumbling coin and also showed an amazing view from above of the two inhumanly sized girls. The coin hit the stage and bounced twice before settling on the floor as the camera zoomed in to show the results.

“Heads it is.” Said Tom as there was some mild applause and he picked the coin back up and showed it to the camera before pocketing it again. “Lisa, you choose, do you want to go first or do you want Patricia to go first?”

Lisa thought a moment or two.

“Will this decide both rounds?” she asked.

“That’s right. If you choose to go first the order will be you, then Patty, then you again and Patty will get the last round.” said Johnny.

“I’ll let Patricia go first then.” Lisa said, her head tilting slightly as she tried to nod.

“OK…OK, gamesmanship is important here. The one who goes last might get a chance to put the screws to the other at the end, but the one who goes first might be able to set the tempo of this, and maybe show the virtue of forgiveness.” Tom paused to look solemn, holding his hands together as if in prayer for several seconds before leaning his head back and laughing his trademarked evil laugh, his laughter echoing metallically throughout the studio. He stopped laughing but it continued for a few more seconds while Tom looked around theatrically.

“Woops! Sorry, I don’t know what came over me. Johnny, tell us how this works.” Stage crew were taking away the buzzers of the two women as the viewing screen lit up again.

“Alright Tom. Lisa and Patricia, we interviewed you two at length from backstage before tonight’s show regarding the different things that the two of you did to each other along the way, as well as your own views on this whole feud. Now we’re going to play some of that footage back. In this round we’ll be revealing something that you know the other did to you, and hear what they have to say about it. Then you’ll have a chance to forgive her or pay her back. Neither one of you get a chance to talk during these rounds except to make your choice. You both had your chances awhile ago to explain yourself. Now is the time to either forgive it or give it back! Tom.”

“Thank you Johnny. Let’s see what may have set these two off.” said Tom as he pointed to the viewing screen. Offstage but in view of the two huge women were similar screens as they couldn’t easily see the center screen. The screen came to life showing Patricia seated at a table with a microphone in the center. There was a person sitting across from her, but you could only see his shoulder as the camera was behind him, obviously the interviewer. Patricia was dressed in the bikini she was still wearing now. The crowd and especially Patricia gasped in shock as they saw in stark contrast the staggering difference in size between now and just an hour ago.

“Patricia tell us another thing that you think or know that Lisa did to you and that you’d like to get some payback for.” Said the interviewer. Patricia smiled and batted her eyes at the camera before she got serious.

“OK, in my junior year, Lisa told a secret that I told her when we were roommates. And it got out and…and it got everywhere, it was on the forums on the campus Net, it was everywhere! It totally humiliated me, and it was totally untrue!”

“What did she say?” The picture paused as Patricia on screen took a deep breath to tell the tale. The crowd made some ‘oohs’ at this. Revealing secrets were another common reason for revenge.

“Oh that must be something juicy!” crowed Tom. “Let’s hear what happened…from Lisa’s point of view!”

Tom gestured to the screen again and it changed from Patricia to Lisa in the same kind of set up and interview scene. Again the crowd gasped and Lisa choked a sob as they all saw how thin and small Lisa was just a short while ago compared to her blob like body that weighed more than a ton now.

“Lisa, we’re interviewing Patricia now also.” said the interviewer, and the Lisa on screen wrinkled her nose in disgust. “And she said that you told a secret during your junior year that humiliated her. Do you know what she’s talking about? What was the secret?”

Lisa was rolling her eyes dramatically at that.

“Yes! Yes I did, I told a secret the skank told me when we were roommates. She was a slut OK? She was always sleeping around and stuff. Well one day she told me…” Lisa paused for effect before leaning into the microphone. On stage both of the huge women were blushing deeply. “Her boyfriend peed on her while they were having sex!”

The screen paused again as the crowd roared in laughter. Patricia was flushing deeper as this was revealed. Tom’s eyes were bugging out comically as he fanned himself with his hand. Tom waited until the laughter died down.

“OK, like Johnny said, we’re not letting them explain anything now that their fat’s in the fire…” Tom paused as a few laughs came from the joke. “But we can see what they said back stage. The view screen changed back to Patricia, and it was obvious it had picked up further along in the interview.

“OK so she told that secret, but was it true?” asked the interviewer. Patricia slammed her hand on the table in aggravation.

“No! That’s just it! We were pretty drunk and in the park, and he…just let himself go. Only a little bit! But it splashed on me a little…and we cleaned up and still went at it. That’s it. This wasn’t some fetish thing or anything! I’ve talked to other girls and they said that something like that happened to them too. But Lisa went off like I wrote it into some porno magazine or something, like I was a pee freak!” the display paused again. Tom was nodding in sympathy with Patricia’s story.

“OK, sounds pretty accidental even innocent on Patricia’s part, let’s hear what Lisa had to say.” Said Tom as the video changed again to Lisa.

“So do you know what happened?” asked the interviewer.

“Yeah, she said it was just an accident and they were drunk or something. Probably true.” Said Lisa, waving her hand as if to dismiss the whole thing. The crowd pointed at Lisa in accusation, making their best guilty ‘oohs!’ as if on cue.

“So who did you tell and why?” asked the interviewer.

“Well, there was this hot guy in my Psychology class, and he was telling me how one of his Fraternity brothers was seeing this girl, and it turned out to be Patty. So I said…” Lisa paused and winked at the camera and held up her fingers crossed. “That she was ‘into’ the whole peeing thing. I told him about the incident and that she liked it!” the crowd booed at the brazen revelation. “But it got a little out of hand; I really didn’t mean it to go as far as it did. I didn’t think he’d put it on the Net.”

The screen faded and then started to change again, revealing the waiting wheel of judgment.

The crowd clapped in anticipation as the wheel lit up and began spinning.

“So it looks like Lisa told the secret, maybe to get a little revenge, but even she admits it got out of hand and that she regrets it…a little. Patricia now is your chance to make her regret it a lot more! She never apologized for this, and she doesn’t get that chance now. Her fat…er fate is in your hands! Will you pay a price to forgive her and maybe earn some redemption yourself? Or will you pay the price to make her really feel your pain? Let me remind you. You both weigh 2,247 pounds. You have 1,863,000 dollars, and Lisa has 2,212,000 dollars. Lisa just admitted that she told the secret and embellished it more than a bit. This is the first round for you. If you choose Payback you might set up a spiral of revenge. Then again, Lisa gets the last shot on you; she might be able to get you at the end. Maybe it is best to get her back first huh? But remember, there are prizes for forgiveness too.”

Tom walked over to Patricia and pinched a handful of Patricia’s over hanging hip flab. “This...can all be reversed and you could be back to normal. That could be the ultimate revenge! What will it be Patty? You get the first shot, make it count!”

Tom grew quiet as the lights focused again on Patricia and the wheel. The crowd was silent as well, so quiet Patricia’s labored breathing could be heard. Several moments went by before Patty finally opened her mouth.

“I choose to forgive!” she announced. There was a loud but mixed reaction from the crowd as some chose to applaud and some to boo. Tom was smiling broadly at this as the lights came up again and the wheel changed to the wheel of forgiveness.

“Patricia, it takes a big woman…a really BIG woman to forgive something like that, especially considering what might be the cost. OK, let’s give the Wheel a spin!” The wheel spun, the numbers and phrases flashing by too fast to see, the multicolored lights making it a kaleidoscope of color as Patricia’s fate was being decided randomly. The wheel didn’t slow down as it spun; it kept going for five seconds before stopping all at once on 300. The crowd was a little confused and then started clapping, unsure of what it meant.

“Johnny, tell us what this means please.” Said Tom as he scratched his head.

“Certainly Tom.” Came Johnny’s response. “Patricia you have a choice here, in forgiving Lisa you can either spend 300,000 dollars…or gain 300 pounds. It’s your choice.” The crowd clapped again as Patricia’s brow furrowed while she mulled over the decision.

“Ooh! Tough one.” Said Tom. After several moments he spoke up again. “Patricia, if you’re having trouble with the choice let me offer some options. If you spend the money, that’s 300,000 less once the show is over. That could make a big difference when this is all said and done. You might get more money later, or you might even lose the weight. But 300 pounds? That’s almost nothing compared to what you gained already. It’s a tough choice.” Tom’s words rarely made it an easier decision for the contestant to make and everyone knew that. Patricia thought some more before finally nodding.

“I’ll put on the weight.” She finally said, and the crowd applauded in approval.

“OK Patty! A good choice all things considered. Let’s put on another 300 please!” said Tom as the stage lights dimmed and the light shone down on Patricia. The wheel changed to show her current weight as it began to rise again. It was rising as quickly as before, but the overall difference on Patricia seemed slight. Some in the crowd couldn’t even see a change. Others thought it looked like Patricia was maybe taking a deep breath, or that perhaps she was shifting in her cushions. Her expanse of hips spread further on the cushions, causing more to hang over either side, but for the most part she didn’t look much different. The light faded and the house lights came back on. Tom was clapping as he surveyed the results and the numbers on the screen changed to show different camera angles and a slow motion replay of the weight gain. The crowd got a better look the second time around and could appreciate the changes more.

“OK! A new record! 2,547! Now let’s see what you’ve also won Patty!” said Tom as he pointed to the screen wheel again. The numbers and options changed, showing the various rewards. There was a slender category on the wheel that Patty was fervently hoping for; ‘Reversal of Fortune’. It was between two rather larger options; ‘Warm feeling of good will’ and ‘Forgiveness is its own reward’. They all had the chance to see the options before it began spinning again at high speed. Patricia held her breath the entire time the wheel spun and let it out with a rush when it stopped as suddenly as before.

“Forgiveness pays dividends!” announced Johnny. Patricia sighed and then listened as Johnny waited for the applause to die down before he explained it.

“Forgiveness can indeed pay off Patricia; you’ve just won double the money you would have paid! That’s 600,000 dollars! You’re now in the lead in both categories over Lisa!” The crowd clapped harder as they showed Patricia’s bank increase to 2,463,000 dollars.

Tom was clapping as well, and Patricia had a somewhat satisfied look on her face as the numbers stopped.

“OK! It can pay to forgive! Maybe we should the focus on the show!” offered Tom to the crowd. The crowd responded with loud boos.

“Just kidding! OK, Patricia chose the kinder path. It’s now Lisa’s turn. Will she follow suit, or will she put the screws to her? And we’re still not done after that! There’s one more round to go as well. We’ll be right back.”

The lights went down as commercials began to air to the millions watching on TV and the Net.
 

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I know what you should do with theStudio's sketches.

1. RAR them.

2. Upload them to Rapidshare.

3. Post the link.

4. ????

5. PROFIT!!!
 

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When the cameras returned, Tom was seen returning from the crowd with applause.

“OK, welcome back! During the break one of our lucky audience members received a copy of our award winning ‘Paybackers’ home version!” Tom pointed back to the crowd to show a young woman waving excitedly to the camera while clutching a box that had the Paybackers logo on it. “See one of our production managers to fill out the proper forms to activate the nanites. You too can own ‘Paybackers’ at home, if it’s legal in your state. Write to your congressman and tell them you have an axe to grind! Send us your home videos of the game; it might win you up to $100,000!”

Tom walked between the two incredibly huge women and looked up at both of them, just seeming to admire the handiwork of revenge they’d had on each other. After several moments he finally spoke again. “Alright! Before the commercial we found out that Lisa told an embarrassing secret of Patricia’s, and then Patricia forgave it! She was forgiving enough to put on 300 pounds and then won 600,000 dollars for her good will. Now it’s Lisa’s turn. We’ll reveal an event that may have ultimately started this whole thing. Remember, these two were best friends in high school, it wasn’t until they were college roommates that things went to pot.” There were a few chuckles from the crowd. “OK, let’s see it.”

The screen changed to show Lisa’s interview. “OK,” the producer began, “you said that you know what started it in your mind, right?”

“Oh yeah,” Lisa said. “It was in the second quarter of our freshman year, and we were starting to get on each other’s nerves, we were just a bit too different. She’s a bit of a slob, and a little lazy, and also sleeps around a lot. Me, I’m…I admit, a neat freak, and was pretty serious about my studying. I’m not a prude, but she was just giving it away, there always a guy in the room, and there was no privacy. But that was OK, we were still friends.”

“So what happened?” The interview changed to show Patricia. She was rolling her eyes dramatically before she began.

“Her mom, who is like the coolest, I still love her. Hi Carol!” Patricia waved into the camera at Lisa’s mother, Carol. “Anyway, Lisa got a care package from home that arrived when she was at a class or something. I signed for it and opened it, ‘cause my name was on it too. Eileen sent our favorite, these marble frosted brownies, a plate full of them. Those are so good! I don’t want to eat them though because I’m afraid I’ll get fat.” There was a roar of laughter from the crowd at that so that Patricia’s next few words were drowned out. “…had a few, then a few more.” The scene changed to Lisa again who was gesturing wildly as she told her side.

“The greedy pig ate the whole thing! I mean I would have shared! I loved those, but I knew my mom had sent them for both of us. I didn’t get a crumb!”

“So did she eat them all?” asked the interviewer.

“She said she didn’t. She said she only had a few and that some guys came over, because our door was always open! She said that they ate the rest.” Lisa harrumphed and crossed her arms over her chest. The scene paused again as it switched to Patricia.

“Lisa claims that you say you didn’t eat them all, that some boys did because the door was open. Tell us what happened. I have to remind you we have lie detection probes on, so be truthful,” said the producer.

Patricia nodded with some guilt. “Well it’s true to a point. A guy did come over, Mike I think, and he had like 2. I ate the rest. Actually I hid one and had it later. So there was really one left when she got back but it was in my drawer and I had it later.” The crowd was making their guilty ‘oohs’ again and the thin Patricia on screen responded as if she could hear them. “I figured she’d be even more mad if there was just the one left I swear!”

“So why was this such a big deal?” asked the producer interviewing Lisa. “Couldn’t your mom send you more? Couldn’t you make some more?”

“No! That’s why I’m so mad! My mom is a great cook, but she kept all her recipes on her computer and it crashed. She lost them all, and she hasn’t been able to make them right since. She doesn’t even try any more. That was my last chance to have those and that slob ate them all! I would have been happy if I could just have had one!” The scene switched one more time to Patricia.

“I hear that Carol lost the recipe after that so I felt pretty guilty, but I also felt bad because I wouldn’t get any more. But it’s really not a big deal! I mean…listen to this…this one time…” The video faded before Patricia could share another incident.

“Wow,” Tom said as he considered the event. “Sounds like that was the straw that broke the camel’s…” he looked up at Lisa. “hippo’s…” he paused again and looked at her a bit longer. “I mean whale’s back. How often do we see on Paybackers such minor or petty incidents that lead them to this sorry state? Those must have been some good brownies. Well with all that money you can buy a lot of brownies and maybe find the recipe again. OK Lisa, time to forgive the brownie incident or pay it back. Take a moment or two and tell us what your choice is.” A microphone descended in front of Lisa.

Lisa struggled to take a deep breath and then croaked almost immediately afterwards, “Forgive!”

The crowd responded with more cheers than boos, possibly because Lisa made her choice so quickly, it was obvious that Tom was impressed as well.

“Well! Aren’t we the forgiving type! Isn’t this game called Paybackers? OK folks, she’s made her choice, let’s see her live with it. Johnny, let’s spin the wheel!”

The screen changed to the wheel again and began flashing through its options at high speed. The multicolored lights played off the audience as the cameras changed to different shots of Lisa as she waited to see what price she had to pay. The wheel came to an abrupt stop on a phrase rather than numbers.

“Decide first, then pay,” announced Tom. The new event and the different options were foreign to everyone. “Um…Johnny?” asked Tom after scratching his head for a few moments.

“Tom, it looks like we hit one of those special rules. Patricia spun and got 300 and she was able to choose whether she wanted to gain the weight or pay the money. Lisa has to choose first if she wants to pay the money or gain the weight, and then we spin again to find out how much!” The crowd exploded in applause while Tom pantomimed a heart attack at the tough choice this presented. Cameras returned to Lisa, whose jowly and inflated face was sweating as she knit her brows, which was about the limit of her mobility at this point.

“Lisa, this is a tough choice. At your weight you probably want to keep every penny you have. Then again, the wheel has some pretty high numbers. There’s even one that could double your weight! But don’t forget, this is just the price you pay. You do get a reward after this. You could end up walking out of here with your money rather than rolling out. What will it be?” The lights dimmed until it was just spotlights on her as she considered her options. She finally heaved a sigh and spoke.

“I’ll take the weight!” she gasped. The crowd clapped their approval and a spotlight shined on the wheel as it spun again.

“OK, we’ll be seeing more of Lisa here in a moment. But how much more?” asked Tom in a bit of a hushed whisper into his mic as the wheel continued to spin. It came to a sudden stop and the crowd gasped.

“750! 750 pounds!” Johnny announced as the crowd was on their feet again.

“750! Wow! Big numbers! That’s more than twice what Patricia took on just a bit ago! Johnny, it’s time to put some meat on Little Lisa over here!” said Tom as he stepped back. Lisa actually managed to flap her hands a few times as the light on her changed to a shade the crowd had come to know well as the weight began to add on. Patricia was smiling at Lisa’s fate and watching intently also.

The weight piled on fast and Lisa visibly expanded once the numbers were flashing past 100 pounds. She was already so huge that 20, 50, 80 pounds wasn’t even noticeable. Past 100 though the people could see her getting wider all around. Her belly was creeping further along the floor, her breasts were filling out even more and reaching down lower to either side of her mammoth belly. Her arms were becoming more and more like fleshy cones, the elbow disappearing under a spill of overhanging flab. Lisa’s face widened still further, another huge chin forming; making it look like her head was simply perched on a hill of flesh. It took less than five minutes for her to reach the amazing weight of 2,997 pounds.

“Just a bucket of chicken under a ton and a half!” crowed Tom as the lights came up again and the crowd roared again. Lisa was breathing heavily from the ordeal but was OK, the nanites would change her body as it needed to, keeping her healthy even at this impossible weight. “A steep price to pay, but what about the reward? Johnny, let’s find out what her forgiveness has given her!” the wheel spun again. Lisa snapped out of her stupor after a few more moments to watch as the wheel stopped. Initially she squealed in triumph at what came up…then it changed to despair.

“OH! So close!” said Tom and the crowd laughed at Lisa’s plight. The wheel had stopped on ‘Warm feeling of good will’ which was just above ‘Reversal of Fortune’. Lisa had thought she hit the jackpot. “Johnny, please fill us in what Lisa has won.”

“She’s already enjoying it now Tom. Lisa that feeling deep in your chest, that’s from forgiving someone. It’s worth more than gold! I hope you appreciate what you won.” There were several moments of silence from the crowd before Tom led them in a loud chorus of mocking laughter at Lisa’s expense. Tom actually wiped tears from his eyes as he finished.

“OK Lisa, I’m sure that feeling was worth going up to 3000 pounds. I certainly hope it doesn’t make you…BITTER!” said Tom, his voice taking on a deep metallic and hollow tone as it echoed through the studio.
 

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Here we go. And thanks for the suggestions regarding the sketches.

I should have more posted later today, maybe even finish the story.
 

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The cameras panned backwards to show the titanic women with Tom between them, like a pygmy or a child. “Ladies…we now enter the final phase of the last round of Paybackers. You two are the biggest women on this show and in history! But there still could be more, a lot more. You’ve taken your grudge further than any two contestants before, and so far it looks like in this last round you’ve been willing to forgive and forget. But now…now we have one last chance at…Payback!” The crowd roared their applause while Patricia and Lisa settled further into their immobilizing bulk.

“This round will again start with Patricia. In this round we will hear an admission of guilt from Lisa, something she did that she doesn’t think that Patricia knows about. A shot in the dark, a guilty plea of revenge that she’s kept hidden. We’ve already heard one from each of them earlier in this game, each admitted to sabotaging the other’s plans. But we have more still. Patricia, are you ready?”

The spotlights framed her head sitting atop her cone like body, where most of the weight had settled below her waist. “Let’s get this over with.” She said with a heavy sigh.

“OK. A tough moment, no doubt. Let’s see what Lisa did.” Said Tom as the lights faded and the screen went back to Lisa’s interview one more time.

“Lisa we need you to tell us something that you did to Patricia as part of this feud that you don’t think she knows about. Something you did deliberately, not by accident.” Said the producer in the foreground.

Lisa thought a second or two and then blushed as apparently she came up with something. “Well she knew what happened no doubt, but I don’t think she realizes that I did this. If she did she might have killed me in my sleep I think. It was the finals at the end of our freshman year. By then we weren’t talking to each other and everyone on the dorm knew about our issues. I was pretty sure she unplugged my alarm on the day of one of my finals. So when she was gone I took a science project I was working on and put it in her desk drawer.” Patricia’s face lit up in realization, but she stayed quiet as Lisa continued.

“It was a powerful electro-magnet and her desk had her computer and some memory sticks in it. I figured it was just going to cause some issues with her computer you know? But it screwed up everything. Her PC was fried, all her memory sticks were ruined, and it even erased some movie disks and a digital photo album. When I found out how bad it was I couldn’t dare tell her. She had to retake a few classes and it really screwed up her GPA that year.” Lisa paused as she considered the full effect of her deed. On stage the 3000 pound Lisa was blushing, her fattened face looking like a tomato with a wig on it. “You’re not going to tell her this are you?” Lisa asked. The crowd began laughing at that as the screen faded. Patricia’s eyes were fixated on Lisa with the intensity of a laser. The crowd got very quiet as the cameras showed her silent anger. Tom’s eyebrows were raised and he took a few cautious steps away from Lisa, as if she might explode from Patricia’s wrathful stare.

“Lisa! That’s some serious revenge! A lot of us may have thought that you were the aggrieved one…but you have some digital blood on your hands it seems.” Lisa opened her mouth to say something, but immediately closed it. “Ah-ah! No talking! The nanites just shut you down. You don’t get to say anything in your defense at this point. We just have your admission, and we have to find out how forgiving or vengeful Patricia is. Patricia?” the cameras pointed over to Patricia again whose fiery stare had now turned cold and calculating. “First Patricia. Did you know or suspect that Lisa did this?”

Patricia frowned and pursed her blubbery lips before finally speaking. “No Tom. I suspected just for a little bit when it first happened. But then I figured that not even Lisa could be such a petty bitch!” The crowd acknowledged Patricia’s outrage with more loud ‘oohs’ and pointing guilty fingers at Lisa.

“OK, well there’s your proof. She admitted it. She ruined your computer, caused you to fail some classes and even some probably personal moments on the photo album. Are you going to let her get away with it?” Tom’s voice grew more intense and driving as he laid Lisa’s guilt plain for all to see.

Patricia nodded twice before lifting her round face. “I’m going to let it go. I’ll forgive her. I’ll do the right thing.” Tom and the crowd paused for several seconds, you could almost hear them blinking in astonishment before sincere applause rippled through the crowd. They truly appreciated the gesture. Home audiences for the most part were not as appreciative. Many had placed bets on the various gambling stations that she’d go for revenge and were now out their money.

“Nice. Nice. C’mon! Give it up!” said Tom as he continued to clap and gestured for the crowd to as well. The polite applause continued for a few more moments before dying down. “I’d ask you to take a bow Patricia, but I think the people in the front row would object.” The applause changed to laughter. “OK, well in one way at least, you’re the bigger person. Let’s see if that will change. Johnny, spin that wheel and let’s find out what it cost her to forgive Lisa!”

“Will do Tom!” announced Johnny as the screen changed to the wheel and began spinning. Patricia was trying to cross her sausage like fingers but was unable to as the wheel finally stopped, again on a phrase rather than numbers.

“Johnny, I think this one explains itself. ‘Crowd’s choice’! Johnny spin it again and the crowd gets to choose whether she pays it in dollars or pounds!” the crowd roared in approval as Patricia silently cursed. Lisa was deep in thought as she watched the results. The wheel spun again, everyone was eager to know what it would cost her to forgive. The wheel finally stopped on:

“500!” Tom, Johnny and the audience all cried at once. Patricia was cursing quietly as Lisa savored the moment. The crowd was chanting “Weight! Weight! Weight!” as Tom tried to get them under control.

“OK, it stopped on 500, that could mean that Patricia pays 500,000 dollars or puts on 500 pounds. The crowd gets to decide. We’ll go by applause. Let’s hear it if you want Patricia to pay the money!” There were perhaps four of five claps scattered around the studio audience. Tom looked around at those that clapped in shock. “What’s wrong with you!” Tom shouted to the audience and they laughed again. “OK, who wants to see her gain the weight?” The roar from the crowd was the biggest one yet, clearly indicating what they’d rather see. They roared nonstop for more than a minute before quieting enough for Tom to continue. “OK, it was close there, but the people have spoken. And they kinda want to see you put on some weight Patty.” Patricia seemed about to say something when the lights switched on and she felt the familiar feeling of sudden paralysis before the weight started piling on.

The crowd grew quiet. Again, even though it was a large amount of weight she was gaining, Patricia was already so huge it was hard to notice until she had put on well over a hundred pounds. Her hips may have reached their maximum in size, they increased a little, but it was finally Patricia’s waist that seemed to gain most of the weight. It certainly wasn’t slim before this point, wider than a few women put together, but it still looked like an hourglass figure, especially when compared to Lisa’s blob-like shapelessness. Her belly creeped forward, pushing her pendulum breasts more to the side and pushing them up in the middle as well. Her belly was soon covering her massive hips in the front and then spilling onto the cushion and past. It didn’t quite surge onto the floor the Lisa’s had, but when she reached her final weight of 3,047 pounds the two of them had more similar shapes. The crowd clapped slowly as the enormity of the two women was realized. Three tons of female flesh dominated the stage, combined it would take more than 20 average people in the audience to even get near that weight. All apparently because of some brownies.

“Patricia, I’m sure you must feel like you earned that. That hard won forgiveness. Now let’s see what you got with it.” Said Tom as the wheel began spinning again. After five seconds it stopped. “200,000 dollars! Not bad! You have more than 2 and a half million at this point. OK, Patricia, you’ve done your part. You chose to forget or forgive all of the incidents. It cost you, no doubt about that. But in the end you may prove to be the biggest one between you two. Lisa! We’re on to you now.”

The camera turned to Lisa, whose head seemed to be sinking into the blubbery mass of her shoulders. “Lisa, you won the coin toss, you chose for Patty to go first, that leaves you with the potential to give a parting shot. Or you could forgive. Right now you’re only fifty pounds apart with Patty in the lead, but Patty also has been paid more for her forgiving nature. She has 451,000 dollars more than you, almost a half million. Right now though, there’s no real winning this game, just lesser extents of losing. Unless you manage to get ‘Reversal of Fortune’, which you can only get if you choose to forgive. Lisa, I want you to consider this carefully as we show what Patricia admitted she did to you.”

All eyes turned to the screen as it showed one last section of Patricia’s interview. “Something I did but she didn’t know?” She asked the interviewer. “Let’s see.” She blushed as she came up with the deed. “OK, ordinarily I would tell someone that I did this, because I’m not a chicken. But this could have gotten me in real trouble with school so I never said anything. Lisa was on the freshman swim team, one of their best. We had been getting more and more pissed at each other by the third quarter. So on the morning before her swim meet at another school, I put a little something in her protein drink.” Patricia covered her mouth and giggled. Patricia on stage would have slapped her forehead in frustration if she could have. Lisa’s eyes began to narrow as she figured out already what Patricia had done.

“So what was it? Did you spit in it or something?” asked the interviewer. The crowd was breathless with anticipation.

“Not exactly. More like I put in a few spoonfuls of a powdered laxative.” The crowd howled with laughter. “I didn’t think it would do anything really, it was a bit more than a normal dose, like an extra spoon and a half. But I was drunk when I did it, and I must have forgotten to mix it up. She got the full concentrated dose because it was on top.” The crowd continued to howl in laughter as they contemplated what happened next.

“So what happened?” asked the interviewer.

“Well, I wasn’t there, and I won’t go into too much detail, but…let’s just say she put up a real stink at that swim meet!” said Patricia as she slapped the table and began laughing. Patricia’s fattened face was wincing as her treachery was revealed. The screen faded and the lights came up as the laughter continued for several more moments.

“You know? I think I may have heard about that…incident a few years ago. OK Lisa! That must have been…messy and embarrassing. You must have suspected though right?” asked Tom.

Lisa struggled for a few moments before she finally managed to speak. “No, not really. You see, the night before I had taken a regular dose of it myself, and now I find out I took another even larger dose! I was banned from the swim team after that! I lost my scholarship!” Lisa’s jowls were quivering with rage. Tom raised his eyebrows at that and the crowd again gave loud and guilty ‘oohs’, this time directed at Patricia.

“OK then. Well, we can see this has you upset. My advice is to take your time, don’t rush into a hasty decision. Think it over for a few moments and then let us know if you’re going to forgive or pay her back for this.” Said Tom. The spotlights and cameras focused on Lisa as she tried calming down. She was taking deep breaths and letting them out with shuddering sighs, the sweat again pouring from her. After several of these deep breaths she seemed calmer and more composed. She gave a slight nod, which was all she could manage at this point. Tom took the cue.

“OK Lisa, it looks like you’ve made your decision. What will it be?” The crowd stayed quiet rather than shouting out their preferred choice.

Lisa took one more shuddering breath and an evil grin slid across her pudgy lips. “Pay…BACK!”
 

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The crowd was on its feet and roaring in approval as Tom made his trademarked Devil’s laugh which echoed even louder than the applause. Red lights and smoke began pouring from the stage as Lisa decided to take a last parting shot at her nemesis. A ton and a half was not enough apparently. This display went one for almost half a minute before the stage returned to normal and the crowd grew quiet.

“Revenge is a heady tonic. A cold dish, a bitter dish, but an addictive one. Lisa hasn’t had her fill yet. Lisa, what was it? Why did you pick revenge? There’s no more money involved, you might make Patricia gain some weight, but you will too, possibly a lot more. Was it the laxative in the drink? The warm feeling turned cold?”

Lisa leaned into the mic. “I might regret it later, but I’m not through with her yet. I’m still too raw from all the stuff she did. I planned this at the coin toss, I thought I might forgive her, but I wanted this as an option. Let’s spin it Tom, I want my pound of flesh!” Said Lisa to raucous cheers. Tom nodded, obviously impressed. He turned to Patricia.

“Patty, you tried burying the hatchet. We saw it; you’re definitely the bigger woman. Just not big enough yet I guess. Anything to say before we spin the wheel?” Patricia’s eyes were wet with fresh tears at this final blow, but she regained defiance as she could speak again.

“Bring it on! I hope you get ten times as much, you fat stupid bitch! I hope it’s worth it!” Patricia shouted into the mic. The crowd responded equally well at Patricia’s defiance. Tom was nodding his approval at this final show.

“OK, bring it on, bring it on indeed. Johnny, spin the wheel of payback and let’s see what Patricia gets!” the crowd’s applause increased again as the wheel spun. This would be the crowd’s first and last glimpse of the payback wheel from these two. The wheel flashed by as the crowd grew quiet. Grim stares were etched on both girls’ faces as they waited for one of them to receive her fate. The wheel spun longer than before, dragging out the suspense. The crowd started getting impatient and began hooting or yelling ‘Stop!’ this went on for several more seconds before the wheel finally stopped. It read: x2. The crowd cheered without quite knowing what it meant yet. Tom waved them down asking for silence. “Johnny, can we get some clarification on what this means.” Asked Tom.

“Yes Tom.” Said Johnny, talking to him as if he was a child. “The x means multiply and the 2 means by 2. We will multiply Patricia’s weight by two.” The crowd was again on its feet roaring at the revelation while Patricia’s jaw dropped to her flabby chin.

“Double her weight! Double! That’s more than 6000 pounds! Over 3 tons! Oh revenge can be sweet!” howled Tom. Meanwhile stage crews were re-arranging the stage and moving aside props, and any other equipment that might be in the way. The two girls who currently weighed 3000 pounds each were also moved so that they were facing each other in the center of the stage. Patricia had managed to howl a mournful howl of despair at the revelation before the light spilled on her and the process of doubling her weight began.

Her weight began at 3,047 pounds, and began to steadily increase. A sound effect of clicking was added as the numbers rolled on the counter, growing higher and higher at an astounding rate of speed. The first noticeable gain was that Patricia again seemed to be growing taller as she expanded. Her hips had not reached their limit with the last fattening, they grew wider and spilled still more over the cushion, but they also pushed her up still higher, her ass was growing even larger now. Her arms while fat now were becoming immobilized tubes of oozing flab resting on her massive flanks. Her breasts grew until they rested on the cushion to either side of her mammoth belly and then began to spill over it as well. The sheer weight of each one was staggering, the cups of the bikini top obviously not providing support, just cover for the nipples at the end of the monstrous boobs.

Her weight was over 4500 pounds when her belly surged again. It grew and swelled more as the rest of her body stopped taking on weight for a bit. Meanwhile the lighting had subtly changed with Patricia’s increasing size, there was light from behind Patricia’s back that made Patricia’s shadow begin to cover and obscure the smaller but still massive Lisa. “5000 pounds!” shouted Tom as Patricia continued to swell. Her belly was now on the floor and her hips began to follow suit, even though they had further to go. Soon they were on the floor to either side of the cushion and creeping along it, her massive backside stayed planted on the cushions though by the way they had been arranged, otherwise she might have fallen.

As she closed in on 3 tons Patricia was probably more than two feet taller than when she was at a mere 3000 pounds. The crowd was chanting ‘Fatter! Fatter! Fatter!’ as the weight continued to gain when she was in the range of 5,800 plus pounds. Her face gained more as well, but stopped before she gained so much that her eyes closed or that her mouth and nose would be blocked by the fat of her own jowls. The crowd was on its feet for the last 100 pounds until she finally reached 6094 pounds. There was another burst of applause from the crowd as the impossible weight of more than 3 tons was reached. Patricia was more than twice Lisa’s weight and looked it. Patricia still had a bit of the cone like figure she’d had the entire show, but every fattened feature was massive in comparison to Lisa, Patricia’s belly was smaller than her hips and ass, but was far larger than Lisa’s, whose belly was her biggest feature. Patricia had managed to keep a bit more mobility as well, but that was gone now. Her hands were fattened flippers with creases in them that indicated her fingers, but she could no longer even move those either. Tom walked out from around Patricia to some laughter; he was completely obscured from view by just one enormous butt cheek of Patty’s.

“People…let’s do the math here. Patty came in at a healthy, curvy 135. She’s now 6094 pounds. That’s…I give up…Johnny, do the math please.” Said Tom as he shrugged his shoulders and looked back at the gargantuan woman.

“Well Tom, that’s a total gain of 5,959 pounds. To put that another way, Patricia is 45.14 times heavier now. She weighs more than an average car, though she is under weight for a typical adult elephant.” The crowd only chuckled a little at the joke as they considered the plight of the fattened woman.

“That’s something. Patricia? Can you hear me? How you doing sweetie?” called Tom up to her. A mic was lowered to her lips. For moments she could do nothing, she was exhausted from the change and even her face was almost immobile. She managed to finally say something. “Spin…the…wheel!” she gasped. Lisa had kept her evil smile the entire time until now. The girls were separated from each other some more as the cushions pulled them apart and the screen lowered again. The crowd cheered again as they wondered what price Lisa had to pay for this revenge.

“Lisa. I believe it’s time to pay up. Your cold dish of revenge is served, and now the bill is left to you, and there’s only one kind of payment we’ll accept. We’re going to find out right now if it’s worth it. Are you ready?” asked Tom.

Lisa took another deep breath and then nodded as much as she could, it was enough for all to see and get the wheel spinning though. The crowd was deathly silent; people at home were glued to their seats as they watched. Later reports would indicate that the third round of this show would become the highest rated live broadcast ever. The wheel continued to spin as they all contemplated what awful fate might befall the unforgiving Lisa. The wheel spun another five agonizing seconds before stopping. The crowd read off the phrase in confusion.

‘What’s good for the goose is twice as good for the gander’ they shouted in unison and then clapped, they didn’t know exactly what it meant, but they knew it was going to be big. Tom waited for quiet before just saying “Johnny..?”

“Tom…this is a big one. Let’s see what the audience thinks it is.” A producer in the crowd went to someone in the audience and held a mic to her.

“Umm…Lisa’s weight is going to double?” she asked.

“Not quite. Think bigger.” Said Johnny. Another guest was given a guess.

“I know! She’s going to double Patty’s weight!” the crowd shouted in approval and Tom clapped as well and then mopped his brow at the thought. Patricia smiled just at the corners of her mouth, while Lisa was fast regretting her choice. Double her own weight was bad enough, but double Patty’s weight…her thoughts were interrupted by Johnny.

“Close. Ladies and gentlemen…Lisa will not weigh double Patty’s weight. Lisa will GAIN twice Patty’s weight!” The crowd was roaring again and Johnny’s total was not quite heard by any, but the numbers flashed on the screen. “15,185!” in fat ballooning graphics the numbers kept flashing on the screen, getting larger with each flash until the numbers were unrecognizable. Lisa would have fainted if the nanites allowed her. Patricia’s smile grew wider as she contemplated that enormous figure. All her pity was buried under her 3 tons of fat, gained at Lisa’s fault.

The screen retracted back into the ceiling. Tom had climbed up on the stairs again so he could look Lisa in the eyes before the process started.

“Well Lisa. You brought your feud on the show. You wanted revenge the most it seemed. You pulled a last minute screw job on your former best friend. Now, we have a heaping helping of payback for you to swallow. I hope you enjoy it, it’s nice and cold. Johnny. I believe Lisa was about to pay the piper?” Tom hurried back down the stairs as the light fell on Lisa one more time.

The screen showed her increasing weight as the light interacted with the nanites causing the weight to accumulate. Another light suddenly flashed down from a different angle and then a third. All had the same glow that the two girls had come to fear and her fast weight gain turned to a rocket of increasing fat. The numbers flew by as the already massive woman took on truly unreal proportions under the power of three lights now.

This time the weight gain was apparent early on, unlike the recent ones. Even though she was already massively fat, she was gaining weight at a truly phenomenal rate. Initially it seemed like Lisa was simply going to explode. Her body swelled in all directions at once, seeming to increase by half again her size. The skin stretched taut on her entire body at the sudden rush of expansion, and she began to quiver, a low burbling groan escaping her lips, despite the nanites locking her down. This quivering went on for several more seconds as the weight piled on but she seemed just at her limit of weight at a mere 4700 pounds. Gasps were coming from the audience and over the betting stations a new category suddenly came up; that Lisa would explode.

When her weight crested 4800 pounds her body finally seemed to adapt to the enormous strain of putting on so much weight so quickly. There was another sudden burst of expansion and it did initially look like she had exploded as so much flesh seemed to fly everywhere. As people got over their shock they saw what happened. She had basically gone from almost 5000 pounds to just over 9000 in barely two seconds. Her vast body completely dwarfed the enormous Patricia now, who was being moved back more so that Lisa could still grow. The cushions under Lisa were gone, swallowed up the tidal wave of flesh that had just struck the stage. Lisa was wider in all ways, taller, thicker, and definitely rounder. From her head to her colossal ass she was probably over ten feet tall. She was far more than that around though, and still getting bigger. After the gasps subsided the audience became quiet again. “We’re more than halfway there.” Whispered Tom as the numbers crested 10,000 pounds with scattered applause.

After that recent burst of expansion her skin seemed loose and billowing, like a balloon that was under inflated and stretched out. As her weight gain continued though the loose skin was quickly being filled again with more and still more fat. Lisa’s face could not be seen by people in the lower floor of the audience; only those in the upper deck could see her face pinched shut with misery as her body surged with astonishing amounts of weight each second. “She is now officially twice as heavy as Patricia. But we’re not…quite…done!” said Tom as the numbers raced past 12,000 pounds. As she was nearing the end of the gain one of the lights faded, and when she reached 14,800 pounds the other extra one faded, leaving just the one to more slowly finish off the gain. Lisa’s body had filled up all the loose skin again and started quivering and shaking like a bag full of jello as perhaps her body had finally reached its limits despite the help from the nanites.

People who thought they lost their money minutes ago when Lisa didn’t explode now began to morbidly hope that they still had another chance. Lisa’s body was a living fat balloon, straining to the last as the weight continued to pile on, nearing 15,000 pounds. “Tom you might want to take cover.” Suggested Johnny. Tom was interrupted from his reverie and paused to think about it a moment before he turned and comically ran behind Patricia, peeking out from behind her mammoth butt to watch the rest of the gain…or the explosion.

The audience held its breath both in the studio and at home. Paybackers was already only quasi-legal. Would someone at last die from the extremes of vengeance it took people to? Lisa was up to 15,100 pounds, with only 85 to go. The weight stopped piling on as she shuddered and quaked from the internal pressure. Finally after tense seconds Lisa made a strange sigh as her body reached new limits of elasticity again. With a gurgling cascade of flesh Lisa’s body expanded again, seeming to increase her dimensions by as much as a third again as the light turned off and the house lights came back on. Her weight stopped at exactly 15,185 pounds. Lisa’s vast body was more than twenty feet around now.

“Ladies and gentleman...woah!” shouted Tom, he was creeping out from behind Patty but suddenly hopped back into cover. Lisa’s body was not done changing, the loose billowing flesh began retracting again, pulling back into the massive central core that was Lisa. Since the light had turned off, the nanites were reclaiming the extra room they had made for extra growth. When her body stopped moving and flowing Lisa sat there in all her glory.

Her arms were mostly gone, fatty pads at the end of wide cones of flab was all that remained of her hands. Her breasts spilled out over the stage, their size was unguessable, five feet around each at their widest were conservative guesses. Their own incredible weight flattened them out on the floor to either side of the all-encompassing stomach. It looked big enough to hold an entire car. Her legs were still gone, and her ass could not be discerned from the overall formless shape she had attained. Her head was a small island in a vast sea of flesh and flab, perched more than 12 feet from the ground as she sat. The nanites had prevented the fat of her own face from smothering her, but she was still almost unrecognizable. Jowls merged with shoulders, chins with her chest. Her head was tilting upwards for the most part, the chin fat forcing her face to look up. Tom carefully crept out from behind Patty again.

“If you’re quite through!” Tom seemed to snarl at one of the belly rolls that Lisa sported now that was nearly bigger than him. The crowd had been mostly silent at the staggering transformation but laughed at Tom’s reaction. “What’s the damage Johnny?”

“Tom, we have sitting there, more than 10 tons of women!” The crowd applauded again. “Lisa now weighs a staggering, jaw dropping, unbelievable, record shattering, car crushing, boat sinking, but fortunately not stage collapsing - 15,185 pounds! She is now quite possibly the heaviest living land animal on the planet. She weighs the equivalent of three rhinos! That’s a gain from 122 pounds…of 15,063 pounds! Are you ready Tom? Are you ready people?” Johnny asked building up the suspense. The crowd applauded and cried out that they were ready. Tom was waving like crazy for Johnny to continue. “Lisa is now just shy of 125 times her starting weight!” Cries of shock and awe were going through the crowd as Lisa was starting to come out of her stupor from the intense transformation. Even Patricia felt a little bad at Lisa’s plight. But then she tried shifting slightly in her seat and was reminded acutely of her immobility due to her 3-ton gain and any pity was squashed.

“That was one hefty plate full of revenge, I tell you,” said Tom. The lights began to wave in sequence as the show’s closing music started playing softly in the background. “Well ladies and gentlemen; we made history in more ways than one tonight. We saw for the first time two people take it to the third round of Paybackers. We saw two women put on enough weight for a small country. Two ladies, but more than 10 tons. These ladies will leave with a lot more than a fat bank account. Let’s hope they think it’s worth it. Good night everyone, join us next time.” The lights faded on Tom and the rest of the stage except for spotlights over the two enormous women, one far larger than the other. Stage crew began coming in from offstage with heavy equipment as well as doctors and medical techs to personally attend on the two former friends.
 

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Dear god, that last section went over the top!

When Lisa said Payback I thought that it was going to finish with Just Patty getting huge. man, that was a twist!
 

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Dear god, that last section went over the top!

When Lisa said Payback I thought that it was going to finish with Just Patty getting huge. man, that was a twist!

That's my style. I usually make more than one woman fat, and then one gets it a lot more than the other. The comparison between the two becomes a great source for imagery.

The payback option had to involve both paying the price, otherwise the coin toss would basically ensure who got the last laugh. What I wanted was to have it be more of a surprise as to what What Lisa would gain. I wanted to draw that out a bit, but the wording was a little tough. I'm glad to see it was stil effective.
 

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truly a fascinating end you are right of course to have an end with one getting the last laugh would be a bit cliche. I do wish there was a sort of afterward. I.E.-Life, Love (or lack there of;))
This would be phenomenal if studio did this one
 

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Another great story, JP. I loved it.

BTW, congratulations on getting art from TheStudio. I would love to see his "Heavy Debt" illustrations. Perhaps you could put them in a new post in the story's forum, with dialogue to illustrate where the drawings fit into the story. Just a thought.
 

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Never befoe have i been so gripped by a story, it's got everything!
How do you do it JP?!?!?
 

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Never befoe have i been so gripped by a story, it's got everything!
How do you do it JP?!?!?
Wow! OK, well the answer might disappoint you on this story. I took elements from two stories that I did previously, first was the game show idea from High Stakes (this story resembles that one the most I'd say). Then from there I took elements from Experiments in Revenge, where I basically try to illustrate the lengths people might go for some payback.

Basically I figured I could get some more mileage out of those. From there I...don't know. I had some decent images in mind, but not much else. I didn't know the target weights they'd hit, the different revenge scenarios from their past, the prize money, the different contests...it all just flowed as I wrote it. I usually didn't see more than a paragraph ahead. The main thing I knew was that one would take the Payback option at the end and that the two would have vastly different weights, everything else was the journey to that point.

The other thing I seemed to know was probably the best time to stop writing so as to build up drama.

That's probably not the best way to write a story, it's not something that I can share as meaningful tips...I can't say "Here, do it like this.". But the end result seemed to be pretty good, the story was well received.

So...that's how I do it. ;)
 
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